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In today's digital era, new technology is very helpful, especially in the economic sector, this is very, many people are helped because of this, and I totally agree with that statement. Overall, the new technology really helped me in doing many things like selling and buying new things.

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In today's digital era, new
technology
 is very helpful, especially in the economic sector,
this
 is very, many people are helped because of
this
, and I totally agree with that statement.
Overall
, the new
technology
 really helped me in doing many things like selling and buying new things.
On the other hand
, the development of
technology
 today is very rapid and
this
 is very deeply felt by all circles, both in the upper and lower classes,
this
 makes it easier for me in my daily activities both want to sell goods and give goods, with the capital of smart devices (mobile phones),
in addition
 can change world civilization,
for example
. When you want to buy goods,
I
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you
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 don't need to leave the house, namely with considerable expenses,
such
 as gasoline costs, parking fees and food costs.
While
 online shopping
in
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apply
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saving all that, just sit at home
then
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and then
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 open
the
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my
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 cellphone to order whatever I want.
In
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On
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 one hand, with
this
 new
technology
 everyone can do activities from home,
for example
, anyone can now open a business (selling online)
does
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and does
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 not need to rent a place and some even do not need capital at all with affiliates on various social media
such
 as TikTok, Instagram or market places
such
 as
shoope
Correct your spelling
shoppe
, Lazada and Tokopedia, business owners only need to send product samples in the form of clothing, food and more. Anyone can become an affiliate simply
promote
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by promoting
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 the product and when there is one item sold, the affiliate will get paid up to 15% of the total price promoted. In conclusion, almost all needs can be purchased through social media and
market places
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marketplaces
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,
this
 proves that new
technology
 is very petrified and provides convenience for everyone.
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