People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
day and age
, people
are exposed to consumptive behaviours. The age
group
was consider
to Change the verb form
was considered
became
the most prominent Wrong verb form
become
factor
affecting habits
on shopping. I slightly disagree with this
view and this
essay will explain why other factors were also
significant reflecting
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in reflecting
the
shopping Correct article usage
apply
habits
.
Regarding to
the topic, the Remove the preposition
apply
age
group
does
not always in line with Verb problem
is
the
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apply
people
’s shopping need
. Fix the agreement mistake
needs
People
believe that certain group
of age
are having
more needs and wants. Wrong verb form
have
For instance
, the
teenagers may have fewer needs and spending Correct article usage
apply
rather
than adult Rephrase
apply
people
. But when the
adults Correct article usage
apply
getting
older (>50 years old), they Wrong verb form
get
are tend
to reduce their spending Change the verb form
tend
habits
. This
phenomenon shows that there are another
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other factors
factor
that may affect people
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people's
habits
in shopping, hence
age
group
is not the main variable.
Furthermore
, there are two other primary reasons that significantly improve the
buying Correct article usage
apply
habits
, which are income and gender. Firstly
, the greater the income, the greater person’s
needs and expenditures. Correct article usage
a person’s
For example
, a high salary
person will have a high level of Add a hyphen
high-salary
life style
, Correct your spelling
lifestyle
while
the
lower Correct article usage
apply
middle income
class Add a hyphen
middle-income
people
will have limited flexibility to shop in their daily life. As for gender factor
, we would generally Fix the agreement mistake
factors
percept
women and men are different in shopping desires. Women are likely to buy trendy fashion or recent beauty products, Correct your spelling
perceive
while
men tend to purchase cutting-edge technology-related products. Therefore
, these evidences
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this evidence
prove
that Correct subject-verb agreement
proves
person’s
earnings and sex aspect are other relevant variables Correct article usage
a person’s
affect
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that affect
people
buying Change noun form
people's
habits
.
In summary, there are many factors considered to influence shopping habit
, Change the noun form
habits
such
as economic factor
and gender Fix the agreement mistake
factors
aspect
, Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
while
the age
group
is not the only factor
that affects shopping behaviours.Submitted by asyifannisakh on
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Provide a more detailed and thorough response to the essay prompt. Include a balanced discussion of the factors affecting shopping habits and their relative significance. Support your ideas with more specific examples and evidence.