People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group they belong to than any other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
day and
age
,
people
are exposed to consumptive behaviours. The
age
group
was consider
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to
became
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the most prominent
factor
affecting
habits
on shopping. I slightly disagree with
this
view and
this
essay will explain why other factors were
also
significant
reflecting
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the
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shopping
habits
. Regarding
to
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the topic, the
age
group
does
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not always in line with
the
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people
’s shopping
need
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needs
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.
People
believe that certain
group
of
age
are
having
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have
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more needs and wants.
For instance
,
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teenagers may have fewer needs and spending
rather
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than adult
people
. But when
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adults
getting
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older (>50 years old), they
are tend
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tend
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to reduce their spending
habits
.
This
phenomenon shows that there are
another
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other factors
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factor
that may affect
people
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people's
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habits
in shopping,
hence
age
group
is not the main variable.
Furthermore
, there are two other primary reasons that significantly improve
the
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buying
habits
, which are income and gender.
Firstly
, the greater the income, the greater
person’s
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a person’s
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needs and expenditures.
For example
, a
high salary
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person will have a high level of
life style
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lifestyle
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,
while
the
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lower
middle income
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class
people
will have limited flexibility to shop in their daily life. As for gender
factor
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factors
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, we would generally
percept
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perceive
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women and men are different in shopping desires. Women are likely to buy trendy fashion or recent beauty products,
while
men tend to purchase cutting-edge technology-related products.
Therefore
,
these evidences
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this evidence
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prove
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that
person’s
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a person’s
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earnings and sex aspect are other relevant variables
affect
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that affect
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people
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people's
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buying
habits
. In summary, there are many factors considered to influence shopping
habit
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habits
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,
such
as economic
factor
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factors
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and gender
aspect
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aspects
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,
while
the
age
group
is not the only
factor
that affects shopping behaviours.
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Provide a more detailed and thorough response to the essay prompt. Include a balanced discussion of the factors affecting shopping habits and their relative significance. Support your ideas with more specific examples and evidence.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping habits
  • age group
  • generational differences
  • individual preferences
  • interests
  • socioeconomic factors
  • cultural influences
  • marketing strategies
  • advertising
  • online shopping
  • technology
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