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People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still don't take responsibility to protect the environment. Why is this? what should be done to encourage people to protect the environment. Give reasons for your answer or include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Undoubtedly, the
environment
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 is one of the vital factors in human
civilizations
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.
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,
people
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 were not serious about the importance of saving it from pollution to ensure the livability of our future generation,
however
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, nowadays humans have started thinking more than in the past. In
this
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 essay, some effective course of action examples will be given on how society can come forward with optimum motivation to protect it. In the very beginning, the
Government
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 should advertise some of the detrimental effects of environmental pollution to a large extent
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 nobody can miss that
awareness
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 program.
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Government
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The government
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 can introduce mass
awareness
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 and start to provide some incentives for eco-friendly users.
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, the Canadian
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 introduced a discount on all-electric vehicles, and they implemented a rule for every automobile insurance company to introduce EV discounts for those cars.
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,
awareness
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 can be generated from an early age by not only including topics for the necessity of environmental protection but
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 adding some educational or recreational programs in TV media or cartoons to encourage adolescents from their early life.
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, they would grow up with a knowledge of how vital to love our
environment
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 and how it links with our existence.
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, the
government
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 can add surcharges to the businesses or industries that are mainly responsible for the rupture of the
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 environmental imbalance.
People
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 can get motivated by some advertising where successful
people
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 would be demonstrated for coming forward to protect the
environment
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 by more tree plantations. In conclusion, it is clear to me that the
government
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 must address the problem of climate change
to
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at
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 all levels to create
awareness
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, and I firmly believe
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government
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the government
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 can motivate more
people
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 to care about the
environment
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 by applying the strategies I mentioned above.
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