Some countries have introduced laws to limit working hours for employees. Why are these laws introduced? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
Law
in Add an article
The law
employment
sector has been a critical issue across the countries. One of the motions that happening is about a working Correct article usage
the employment
hours
regulation
. In my opinion, this
law is important to protect the right
of Fix the agreement mistake
rights
labours
and in the long Correct your spelling
labourers
term
it would be a positive development towards Add a comma
term,
the
society.
In my point of view, it is Correct article usage
apply
essentials
to regulate the Fix the agreement mistake
essential
employment
system in a country. The working-hours
arrangement arised
to limit the formal sector’s working Correct your spelling
arose
time
. Hence
, it is not exceed
the level of capacity and exploit worker’s working ability. Change the verb form
does not exceed
For instance
, there are many real cases in local manufacturer
Replace the word
manufacturing
company
that oblige employees to Fix the agreement mistake
companies
working
out of the regular Change the verb form
work
time
, but it was not count
as Change the verb form
was not counted
overtime
work
. Regarding to tackle
Change the verb form
tackling
this
problem, the government launch
Wrong verb form
launched
policy
on working Correct article usage
a policy
hours
restriction. Consequently
, companies are required to comply with the 8-
Correct your spelling
8-hour
hours
work
regulation
, and if in some cases there are workers that exceed the working hours
arrangement, the company is supposed to pay overtime
costs. By effectively implementing this
new rules, there would be no more workers Correct determiner usage
these
were
unpaid in their Wrong verb form
being
overtime
hours
,
unless the company Remove the comma
apply
were disobey
or Wrong verb form
disobeyed
oblivious
Add a missing verb
was oblivious
with
the new system.
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to
Furthermore
, the employment
policy on working hours
control would mutually benefits
both Correct subject-verb agreement
benefit
of
the employers and employees. The working people Change preposition
apply
able
to Add a missing verb
are able
work
effectively during their regular time
, as well as
feel appreciated by received
extra money if they Wrong verb form
receiving
work
over in time
. In addition
, the employers do not need to pay insurance claims of their sick employees,
or open a new opportunity to seek out a new employee for turnover. Remove the comma
apply
As a result
, this
will contributes
to Change the verb form
contribute
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the government
government
role to control and regulate the Change noun form
government's
employment
sector. Hence
, it could be a positive enhancement in society in terms of the long run
effect of the law itself.
In summary, working Add a hyphen
long-run
hours
regulation
should be support
to ensure the Wrong verb form
supported
labour’s
right is fulfilled, Change noun form
labour
as well as
it would benefits
many stakeholders involved. In terms of the Change the verb form
benefit
regulation
development, I would be more agree if the new policy could be legalized on a working contract with standard operational procedures (SOPs) specified on overtime
work
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