Some countries have introduced laws to limit working hours for employees. Why are these laws introduced? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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employment

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sector has been a critical issue across the countries. One of the motions that happening is about a working

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regulation

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. In my opinion,

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law is important to protect the

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it would be a positive development towards

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society. In my point of view, it is

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to regulate the

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system in a country. The working-

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arrangement

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to limit the formal sector’s working

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the level of capacity and exploit worker’s working ability.

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company

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companies

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that oblige employees to

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out of the regular

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, but it

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overtime

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problem, the government

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policy

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on working

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restriction.

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, companies are required to comply with the

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8-hour

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work

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regulation

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, and if in some cases there are workers that exceed the working

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arrangement, the company is supposed to pay

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costs. By effectively implementing

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new rules, there would be no more workers

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unpaid in their

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unless the company

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the new system.

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policy on working

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control would mutually

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the employers and employees. The working people

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effectively during their regular

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feel appreciated by

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extra money if they

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or open a new opportunity to seek out a new employee for turnover.

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role to control and regulate the

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sector.

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, it could be a positive enhancement in society in terms of the

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effect of the law itself. In summary, working

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regulation

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right is fulfilled,

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many stakeholders involved. In terms of the

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development, I would be more agree if the new policy could be legalized on a working contract with standard operational procedures (SOPs) specified on

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Some countries have introduced laws to limit working hours for employees. Why are these laws introduced? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Social media is an essential part of young people’s lives nowadays, but its impact is often criticized. What are the advantages and disadvantages of social media in teenagers’ and young adults’ lives?

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Some people rely too much on doctors instead of taking care of their own health. They think all health problems can just by ‘fixed’ by visiting doctors. What problems could this approach to healthcare cause and how might they be solved?

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It is becoming increasingly popular for people to tourist destinations during public holidays. What problems does this causes? What solutions are these to this problems.