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The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.
The given chart presents information about the transformations in the rate of Dubai Gold sales in 2002, counted by millions of dirhams.
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, it can be seen that the sales decreased and it shows a fluctuating trend. The revenue of Dubai Gold Sales started at 200
million
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 Dirhams in January and it increased by 50
million
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 until February. From there, it kept soaring until it peaked at 350
million
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 Dirhams in March.
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, it experienced a dramatic fall by around a quarter lot and arrived at a hundred sum in July, and managed to rise slightly to approximately 200
million
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 in August. After witnessing another decline in a month by roughly a hundred
million
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, there was a 100
million
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 rise in October, from 100
million
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 to almost 200
million
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, and in
further
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 months it remained steady at 200
million
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 until the end of the period.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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