The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients  may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of three different nutrients contaminating
in
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four meals, surveying
from
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Americans.
Overall
, dinner proves to be a meal
that is
composed of
sodium
and saturated fat the most,
while
added
sugar
is mostly in snacks. For morning dishes, it is evident that
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really little unhealthy nutrition, with only 14%
of
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sodium
and 16%
of
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both
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saturated fat and added
sugar
.
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noon, American citizens are observed to consume those unhealthy nutrients more, as shown by the pie charts that lunch food is composed of nearly one-third of
sodium
, a quarter of saturated fat, and 19% of added
sugar
. In the evening,
sodium
and saturated fat seem to be both
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unhealthy nutrients in the dinner dishes, making up 43%
for
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the former and 37%
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the latter,
while
the percentage of added
sugar
in those dishes accounted for just 23%. Among all of the meals, snacks stand out as they contain a high amount of added
sugar
, which constitutes 42%;
however
, snacks contain only 14%
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sodium
and about one-fifth of saturated fat.
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