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The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in 2002.
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, it is obvious that the most inadequate month was March and the worst was July. At the beginning of the year, the
amounts
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 of Dirhams
were
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was
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 200
millions
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million
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 which increased until March. The biggest totals of Dirhams were exactly 350
millions
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million
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 in the month of March.
Nevertheless
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, in April the
quantity
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number
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 of sales started to significantly decrease and the numbers dropped above 150
millions
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million
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.
Furthermore
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, the money hovered between June and September. After the particular descended, the totals rosed up from September and remained stable.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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