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Band 1

Some people think the media should not report details of crime to the public. What extent do you agree or disagree.

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I agree that
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media
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the media
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 should report details of
crime
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.
Media
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 itself is
power
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the power
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 to inform
citizen
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citizens
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 and spread awareness. Hopefully by exposing the perpetrator, people become aware that if you commit a
crime
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that
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apply
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you will get the
consequence
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consequences
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 including
citizen
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citizens
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 will
also
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 remember you as a
crime
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. The funniest thing here in Indonesia is I see the
media
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 put details of the victim and didn't expose the perpetrator
instead
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. How sad it is.
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At
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In
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 the end, I believe
media
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 play a big role
to spread
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in spreading
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news
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the news
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 and in
this
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 matter can be helpful to make a
crime
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 think twice before
commiting
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committing
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crime
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a crime
the crime
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.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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