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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed
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The given table represents the information about the police
budget
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 in 2017 and 2018 in the same area of Britain. The pie charts demonstrate the way
money
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 was spent in the aforementioned years. As a whole, the highest proportion of the
budget
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 stems from the national government with more than 170
million
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 pounds. The total amount of
budget
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 was 304
million
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 in 2017, and it rose to 318
million
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 in 2018. In both years, the largest area related to spending
money
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 was salaries, for both officers and staff.
According to
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 the data, local taxes had a rise from 91
million
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 to 102
million
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 in 2018. Other sources have been responsible for only 38
million
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 of the police
budget
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. Moving on to the charts, the salary percentage was about three-forth of the whole
,
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 and decreased slightly to 69 per cent in the next year. The second top place in which the
money
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 has been spent is on the buildings with the same percentage in two years. The
money
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 dedicated to technology was only 18 per cent in 2017, and
this
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 amount has decreased sharply to 14 per cent in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, money, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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