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In some countries, there is not enough respect for elderly people. What are the causes of this? Suggest some solutions.

#countries #respect #people
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İt
known
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knew
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 that elderly
people
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 are
volueble
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valuable
 for us.
Unfortunalty
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Unfortunately
, young
people
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 are not
enterested
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interested
about
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 it. İ will
expline
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explain
 the problem's reasons and
slutions
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solutions
 in
this
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 essay. On the one hand, time was
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a change
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change
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changing
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 with
people
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 together, some
devalopment
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development
affet
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affect
 our
culture
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thats
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that's
 why we are
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changing
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day
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day
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of
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 course respect
to
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for
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 our elder
people
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 were
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the change
a change
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change
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changed
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. There are some reasons;
first,
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internet
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the internet
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 is so common
nawodays
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nowadays
. Even if it has
benefit
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 side and
bad
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a bad
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 side,
for example
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,
people
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 can use it for
communate
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communication
 but it can
change
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to
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for
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peole
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people
especially
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, especially
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teenager
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teenagers
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. They can forget
soe
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to
show to elder
people
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some times
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sometimes
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.
Second,
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transport is
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change
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changing
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 our
life
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lives
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. İn old
time
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times
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,
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a human
the human
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human
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humans
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 could not go
to
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apply
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every where
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everywhere
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 because
teacnology
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technology
 did not
devalop
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develop
 that time.
However
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, it is possible today. We can go
every where
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everywhere
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 by plane or
cars
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car
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.
That is
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 so important because our
culture
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 changed since the
devalop
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develop
trasportaion
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transportation
. Human
bing
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beings
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 realise
defferint
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different
people
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 and
lifes
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lives
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.
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, nursing homes come from
Eroupian
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European
 countries,
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and inur
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inur
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our
culture
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do
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does
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 not have
this
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.
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, economic stuvatation
affet
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affects
 to
looking
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look
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 and respect
to
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for
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 elderly
people
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 because human
bing
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beings
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 can not
affert
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afford
 care
of
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for
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 their elderly.
That is
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good
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a good
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exaple
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example
for
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of
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 it, one of
persn
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person
who
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whom
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i
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I
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 saw
in
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on
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 the news
of
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on
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 TV. According
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to
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the news; the man
lives
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has
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 financial problems and he had to leave his father
to
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at
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 the nursing home. after
few
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a few
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mounts,
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mounts
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months
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 he felt so much regret and went to get his father back.
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however
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however,
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 his
fater
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father
 died when he was arriving
the
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home. After
tahat
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that
, he
kill
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kills
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his self
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himself
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 because he
regret
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regrets
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too
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it too
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 much.
To sum up
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,
ekonomik
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economic
stuvetion
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situation
 and
devalop
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develop
teacnology
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technology
are
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are changed
are changing
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change
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 our
culture
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.
Therefore
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, respect
to
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for
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 elderly
people
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less
day
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day
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.
in
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 my opinion, that will
change
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 strongly and our elderly
people
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 will have to look
them self
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at themselves
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. We can
change
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 it if we can educate our
cheldren
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children
.
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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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