In some countries, there is not enough respect for elderly people. What are the causes of this? Suggest some solutions.
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is known
has known
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develop
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develop
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beings
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different
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lives
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our
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.
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, economic stuvatation affet
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affects
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look
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for
people
because human bing
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good
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of
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person
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apply
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kills
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himself
regret
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regrets
too
much.
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it too
To sum up
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economic
stuvetion
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situation
devalop
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develop
teacnology
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technology
are
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are changed
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change
our culture
. Therefore
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for
people
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my opinion, that will Capitalize word
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change
strongly and our elderly people
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it if we can educate our cheldren
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