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Some believe that new science related to criminal forensics should be used to look at old cases. To what extent do you agree or disagre

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It is thought by many people that science these days could be used to investigate criminology cases that have not been solved in the past times. I strongly believe that the improvement of technology and science can help to uncover new evidence and shed
lights
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 on old cases,
although
 there is a possibility of finding nothing
due to
 a long period of time. On the one hand, there were many unsolved crimes that have been closed because of lack of evidence,
however
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 the advanced technology and the novelist scientific methods could potentially unlock new theories that support the truths of an incident. As an
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,
a
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famous kidnapping case from months ago,
forensic
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a forensic
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 team was able to track down the kidnappers and the child’s location based on IP
adresses
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addresses
.
Consequently
,
this
 approach
persuade
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 victim’s rights and could
also
 gain society’s
trusts
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 in the justice system.
On the other hand
, re-opening an old case not only it is time-consuming but
also
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 guarantee of finding
a valid evidence
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valid evidence
a piece of valid evidence
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due to
 the
fragilinity
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fragility
 of the
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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. For
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, fingerprints could be easily removed by rainfalls, so even developed machines could hardly
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it
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.
Instead
,
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 should focus on investing the budget
on
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 safety facilities
such
 as CCTVs in public in order to provide a peaceful environment and reduce crime rates
for
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 the future.
To sum up
, it is necessary to investigate past crimes with the help of modern technologies to provide justice for those innocent people, even though it requires a long time and might be chances of resulting nothing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • criminal forensics
  • advancements
  • evidence
  • old cases
  • science
  • technology
  • reopening
  • time-consuming
  • costly
  • new evidence
  • pursuit of justice
  • reexamining
  • overall opinion
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