The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart show the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart show the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The horizon chart gives information about the proportion of males and females doing household chores and the average
time
to do housework. In general, both genders allocated most of their
time
to cooking,
while
the opposite was true for house repairs.
In addition
, cooking and cleaning were two tasks that were performed by the largest percentage of both
men
and
women
. In detail, over 80% of females spent
time
cooking compared to 60% of
men
.
Similarly
,
while
60% of
women
spent
time
cleaning, the figure for
men
stood at around 40%.
On the other hand
, a slightly larger proportion of
men
were involved in pet care at over 20%,
while
this
figure for house repairs was twice that of
women
at 18%. In terms of
time
spent
to perform
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performing
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these tasks,
women
allocated 80% of their
time
on
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cooking, followed by the figure for cleaning and pet care was 68% and 20% respectively. The
time
that
men
spent on the same task was slightly lower, at 60% for cooking, over 40% for cleaning and 20% for pet care. House repairs were witnessed under 20% of
time
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the time
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that
men
spent on, which is higher than that of
women
by 15%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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