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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent
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, technologies
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 continuously developed in terms of transportation, including
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, buses and
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. It is predicted that these vehicles will be automatic and passengers will be the main group who
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 essay will examine why the drawbacks outweigh the benefits in the following paragraphs. Human-drive vehicles in the future will be
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driverless and these have many disadvantages. First of all,
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automatic transport can undergo accidents when the system has a problem. When
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human by destroying their bodies,
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 in the leg.
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 whose job is a driver may lose their occupation.
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, they need to find a new job to make them survive and gain profit again.
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 occupation is not simple as they need to find
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new skills which
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, buses and
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 may send the passengers
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errors and un-updated maps.
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 may lose
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time
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 and cannot travel to the destination on
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driverless
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 have many drawbacks that can affect
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 of
people
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, unhuman-drive transport has
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benefits in terms of privacy and convenience.
People
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 will feel saver to
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 especially women because it has no human who
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 our body which is now a problem in society.
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, it gives convenience to
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 since it
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 to
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 and waiting until it reaches
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its destination
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, these might affect the elderly because they do not understand how to
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 driverless vehicles gain benefits, including privacy and simple
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, they have drawbacks of accidents, occupation
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 and
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clearly
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 stronger than
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the advantages
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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