The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned 

future development of the site.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and 

make comparisons where relevant.
The given maps illustrate the layout of
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the islip
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islip
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Islip
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town
centre
in present-day and how it will be developed in the future.
Overall
, there will be immense improvements, and the
town
centre
will
be undergone
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so much change, the most significant of which will be the transformation of the countryside and expansion of the main
road
. Today, there is a main
road
running
throogh
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through
west-east of the
town
centre
with shops at the middle alongside
of
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it.
In addition
, the main
road
has two
side
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sides
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, which first
is leading
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leads
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to the school southwest of the
town
centre
, and the other
is leading
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leads
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to the
park
in the southeast. There are
also
several residential located in the middle of the Islip
town
centre
. In the future, there will be
dual
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a dual
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carriageway established
surronding
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surrounding
the
town
centre
. The location of the school,
park
and housing remain
unchange
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unchanged
in the future, unless there will be some part of the
park
cleared up
therefore
leaving so much space for the new residents located beside it.
Morover
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Moreover
, the main
road
will be demolished and turned into
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a pedestrians
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pedestrians
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pedestrian
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way only.
Furthermore
, the countryside and shops north of the countryside will become shopping
centre
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centres
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complited
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completed
complete
with public facilities
such
as
car
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a car
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park
at the east of
shopping
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the shopping
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centre
and
bus
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a bus
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station nearby.
Lastly
, the new
hosuing
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housing
will be
also
added to the end of the side of the dual carriageway.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre, road, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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