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The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the transformation of gold
rate
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sales
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 in Dubai in
the
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2002. The line chart shows the average monthly
sales
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rate
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. The data is measured by
Million
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 Dirham currency. The general
trend
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 of the line chart shows a
fluctuatuion
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fluctuation
fluctuating
trend
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 for the
sales
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rate
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 throughout the
year
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.
According to
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 the the line chart, since
january
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 the average of Gold purchasing went up from 200
million
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dirhams
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 and dramatically rocketed reaching its peak of the
sales
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rate
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 of the
year
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, about 350
million
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dirham
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.
Then
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, the amount continued to dramatically plummeted in
july
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 by approximately 110
million
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dirhams
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.
Furthermore
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, the
trend
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 started to recover back to 200
million
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dirhams
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. The
sales
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rate
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then
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 started to move up and down over the
last
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 six
month
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 of the
year
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. The
trend
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then
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 reached a plateau of about 190
million
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dirhams
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 in the
last
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 month of the
year
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, just below the number of starting
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trend
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 back in
january
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January
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, sales, million, trend, year, dirhams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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