The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The provided line graph delineates the fluctuations
of
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total
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the total
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population
in four
cities
in
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70 years.
Overall
, the most
population
was allocated to
Philippines
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the Philippines
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in 1970,
while
it will overtake
by
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Indonesia and Malaysia towards the end of the survey.
Moreover
, all
cities
have upward trends in the rate of
population
.
Philippines
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The Philippines
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ranked first among other
cities
and was 10 times more than
Thailand
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population
in 1970.
Philippines’
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The Philippines’
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population
rose significantly in 1990 a little less than 50%,
while
it was responsible for
the
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half in 2010. It was followed by a marked growth in 2020 and it will continue to a moderate rise in 2040 (almost 55%). It is seen a slight rise in the
population
of Thailand more than twice as high as its level in 1970 (about 45% in 2040).
According to
the data, in 1970, Indonesia and Malaysia stood at almost 13% and 30%
population
in
cities
respectively. Both of them have a steady increase in their people’s number, it is predicted that the number of citizens will peak at 60% for Indonesia and 80% for Malaysia in 2040. The latter city will rank first in the
population
of the public in 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • Asian countries
  • living in cities
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • introduction
  • overview
  • trend
  • body paragraph
  • compare
  • predicted percentages
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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