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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph below depicts the variation of
tourist
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 from abroad to 3 different regions in Europe for two decades. On the
y-axis
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 there is
amount
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the amount
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 of
people
 who visited and on the
x-axis
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 it
is showing
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 the years.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the coast came at the top to be visited by a lot of
people
amongst
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 the three sections. The mountains
was
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 the least zone of visitation for the past two decades. In detail, the coast was ahead of all areas since 1987 with a figure of
40 000
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40,000
 guests.It went on into a slight decrease which led to a dip of about 35 000
people
 in 1992. From that year there was a massive
resurgance
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resurgence
 of
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 and it overtook the lakes and
reaches
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to
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its peak of over 75 000 visitors in 2007. The lakes had the smallest amount of
people
 in 1987 which was 10 000 . There was a sharp rise
of
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 visitors from 1987 to 1997 which was
40 000
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40,000
 in total.During that year ,there was a
soaring
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 of travellers which marks
approximetely
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approximately
 74 000 in 2002. That same year,
vistors
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visitors
 at the lake scaled down to
50 000
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50,000
guest
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. The mountains
was
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 the
second highest
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second-highest
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 tourist zone in 1987. It went up in 1992 with an amount of over 20000
people
 and at the same
time
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 it was beaten by the lakes which was the
last
 area. From 1992 , it constantly
rise
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 to about 35 000 in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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