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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.*Cambridge English 16

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.*Cambridge English 16
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The diagram shows the process involved in the production of instant noodles.
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, there are 8 steps
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mixing
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cooking and drying
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labelling and sealing one In the beginning, the flour is transported from the silos where it is usually stored to a mixer, where it is mixed with water and oil. Next, the mixture passes through several rollers to form some dough sheets. The dough sheets are
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 turned into discs that are cooked in oil and dried just after. Once the cooking process is completed, the instant noodles are put into cups, where various vegetables and spices are added.
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 the cups are labelled
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sealed, and ready to be delivered
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