Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Sporting activity have been a trendy issue worldwide. It is often argued that some individual countries succeed negative advancement of they will grow old and the next
their
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in their
sports
by providing a
special facilities to coach highly professional Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
competitors
while
it should be a replacement of
supplying a space for the majority to use. Change preposition
for
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essay will explainCorrect article usage
the
this
notion.
While
the talented players
are gaining more skills during training, the upcoming players
will lack skills because of restricted training centers
. In Change the spelling
centres
this
case , the sports
sectors are disadvantaging new contestants and other contestants who are in the line of achieving their career
. It is focusing more on people who are always winning all the time. They are trained by top coaches , Fix the agreement mistake
careers
the
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and the
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
are
advanced and Correct subject-verb agreement
is
are
being monitored thoroughly Correct subject-verb agreement
is
hence
they will always remain successful. But to
some Change preposition
apply
competitors
who are not known
they lack knowledge , skills, ideas and training Verb problem
apply
at
the end they will give up on their talents. Change preposition
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Moreso
the professional Correct your spelling
Moreover
players
does
not remain young, in the long runChange the verb form
do
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,
players
will be incompetent. I think the
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apply
sports
management must involve everyone on
training so that they will be able to learn from their legends and gain more experience.
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in
Furthermore
, this
give
rise to Change the verb form
gives
dicrimination
in Correct your spelling
discrimination
sports
whereby only best
player Correct article usage
the best
have
special training Change the verb form
has
centers
. Some Change the spelling
centres
competitors
will feel being looked down upon with this
criteria and it is also
favouratism
. They will end up quitting Correct your spelling
favouritism
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the sport
sport
and Fix the agreement mistake
sports
open
a new chapter where they Wrong verb form
opening
could
feel welcomed. It is a pity that the young trainees will not have an opportunity to see the experts training. I opine that they should be trained equally in the world of Wrong verb form
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sports
and they should implement policies that guard against discrimination.
In conclusion,young players
are lacking
experience in training because the coaches Wrong verb form
lack
focuses
on Change the verb form
focus
best
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the best
players
. There is also
segregation which cause
other unfortunate Change the verb form
causes
competitors
to give up on sports
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