Some people say that students should take a gap year after high school to work. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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It is argued that nowadays many people say that
students
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should take a
gap
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year
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before entering
university
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to gain more
experience
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.From my perspective, I completely agree that
student
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students
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should take a
year
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off after graduating before entering
university
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. On the one hand, it is true that there will be many benefits if
students
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take a
gap
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year
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. An explanation for
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is that they can take time to make a suitable decision about what major and what job to study.
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, many
student
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after high school are hurry to enroll in
university
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without prior planning, so after studying for a
while
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, they feel they are not suitable so they change majors and
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a lot of time.
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that,
take
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a
gap
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year
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can
enrichs
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enrich
enriches
their life
experience
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.
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,
take
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a
year
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off gives
students
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a great opportunity to learn new things outside that they are not taught in school.To illustrate they can meet people and learn about their culture, make friends to expand their relationships or
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more diverse cultures when
traveling
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travelling
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or working, they can enrich themselves with
knowledge
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the knowledge
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they didn’t know previously so their future
career
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careers
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will be enhanced.
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, it should be acknowledged that taking a
gap
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year
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creates problems. Specifically, they will suffer from peer pressure and feel left behind.
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is because
that
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apply
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students
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who enter school later have difficulty adjusting to the
university
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environment and most jobs for
gap
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year
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takers are not valuable (because they have no
experience
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).
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, statistics found
26
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that 26
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% of
students
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who take a
gap
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year
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never enter tertiary education.
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,these
students
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have no interest in learning and cannot catch up with their classmates,
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moreover
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moreover,
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they fail to gain useful
experience
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and waste one
year
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. In conclusion,
take
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taking
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a
gap
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year
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has
it’s
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advantages and
disvantages
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disadvantages
. If they determine
and
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effort they will have more favourable.
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