Some people say that students should take a gap year after high school to work. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?
It is argued that nowadays many people say that
students
should take a gap
year
before entering university
to gain more experience
.From my perspective, I completely agree that student
should take a Fix the agreement mistake
students
year
off after graduating before entering university
.
On the one hand, it is true that there will be many benefits if students
take a gap
year
. An explanation for this
is that they can take time to make a suitable decision about what major and what job to study.For example
, many student
after high school are hurry to enroll in Change to a plural noun
students
university
without prior planning, so after studying for a while
, they feel they are not suitable so they change majors and wasting
a lot of time. Wrong verb form
waste
Beside
that, Replace the word
Besides
take
a Wrong verb form
taking
gap
year
can enrichs
their life Correct your spelling
enrich
enriches
experience
.In other words
, take
a Wrong verb form
taking
year
off gives students
a great opportunity to learn new things outside that they are not taught in school.To illustrate they can meet people and learn about their culture, make friends to expand their relationships or exploring
more diverse cultures when Wrong verb form
explore
traveling
or working, they can enrich themselves with Change the spelling
travelling
knowledge
they didn’t know previously so their future Add an article
the knowledge
career
will be enhanced.
Fix the agreement mistake
careers
On the other hand
, it should be acknowledged that taking a gap
year
creates problems. Specifically, they will suffer from peer pressure and feel left behind. It
is because Correct pronoun usage
This
that
Correct determiner usage
apply
students
who enter school later have difficulty adjusting to the university
environment and most jobs for gap
year
takers are not valuable (because they have no experience
). For example
, statistics found 26
% of Correct word choice
that 26
students
who take a gap
year
never enter tertiary education. As a result
,these students
have no interest in learning and cannot catch up with their classmates,moreover
they fail to gain useful Add a comma
moreover,
experience
and waste one year
.
In conclusion, take
a Wrong verb form
taking
gap
year
has it’s
advantages and Replace the word
its
disvantages
. If they determine Correct your spelling
disadvantages
and
effort they will have more favourable.Correct your spelling
an
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