You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
There is no doubt that the government should support jobless will be beneficial for
people
. There are people
who think that long term
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long-term
job
seekers who are receiving benefit
from Fix the agreement mistake
benefits
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the governmet
governmet
should do some voluntary Correct your spelling
government
works
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work
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that
the
society. In Correct article usage
apply
this
essay
I will explain my support for Add a comma
essay,
this
view with relevent
examples.
Mandatory voluntary Correct your spelling
relevant
work
for the long term job
less
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fewer
people
will helps
to reduce miss use of government benefits. There are several Wrong verb form
help
people
who has
good health and Change the verb form
have
not
willing to Add a missing verb
are not
work
for living
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a living
,.
They are obtaining Change the punctuation
,
.
goverment
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government
aide
is causing Correct your spelling
aid
burden
on the Add an article
a burden
tax payers
.
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taxpayers
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a recent study in the United Kingdom Change preposition
apply
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indicating
that Wrong verb form
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drug addicted
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drug-addicted
people
are using Fix the agreement mistake
this
these
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this
finacial
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financial
aides
to buy drugs which Correct your spelling
aid
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causes
causing
harm to Wrong verb form
causes
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apply
the
society.
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apply
Moreover
, the volunatry
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voluntary
work
will improve the productivity of the long term
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long-term
job
seekers. The
person who is away from Correct article usage
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the
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work
for many years might become incompetent to do professional or casual works
.
Voluntary Fix the agreement mistake
work
work
will help them to be more productive and active. For instance
, the
voluntary Correct article usage
apply
work
in the
old age homes will help them to find a Correct article usage
apply
job
in a similar of
organisation.
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apply
Furthermore
, It will give a message to the youngster
that they have to find Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
a jobs
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a job
jobs
instead
of getting government aide
.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
aid
The
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apply
volunatry
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voluntary
work
will help to reduce the missuse
of Correct your spelling
misuse
governmet
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government
aide
for the Correct your spelling
aid
job
less
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fewer
people
, and it will also
help to
be more competent Correct pronoun usage
them to
for
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in
the
jobs. Change the word
their
Although
goverment
aid must be delivered to Correct your spelling
government
deserved
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deserving
poeple
, it should not be Correct your spelling
people
missused
.Correct your spelling
misused
missed
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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