Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree?
Nowadays, advertisements play a key role in selling
products
, in which their extent of effectiveness outweighs the real needs of consumers. I completely agree with this
opinion.
Big companies around the world study people
's interests by collecting data from social media like Instagram and Facebook. Then
, they select some target groups for their products
, which they maneuver
on them in the advertisements. Companies create a feeling of a need for their goods Change the spelling
manoeuvre
on
these target groups. Change preposition
in
For example
, Apple released a new iPhone, then
removed the old headphones from its packaging. They started extended advertising about wireless iPad which was interesting for the Correct word choice
and then
people
who followed new technology. As a result
, it became a best selling
product. Today, most iPhone users buy an iPad as well.
Add a hyphen
best-selling
While
using mobile phones, laptops, computers, watching TV programs or reading billboards across the city and
etc... many advertisements can be seen in a frequent way. Even Correct word choice
apply
people
may see their favorite
celebrities or influencers Change the spelling
favourite
of
social media in commercials Change preposition
on
of
Change preposition
for
products
. Every year, companies spend a lot of money on advertising and sign expensive contracts with famous people
such
as actors or athletes as their advertising models. As a result
of being exposed to such
a huge amount of advertising, people
will be curious to try the products
and use them even if they don’t really need these goods. Therefore
, the amount of purchases increases.
To sum up
, I believe there is a lot of knowledge behind the advertising industry which leads the advertised product become
a bestseller by gathering Add the particle
to become
consumers
data and influencing the target groups.Change the noun form
consumer
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