Some people think it is always an advantage to buy local products. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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nowadays, the trend of buying local

products

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gradually increasing since many of them are well developed to

suits

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the

citizens

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activities. I strongly agree that getting goods from local brands will have more benefits, not only they can have better quality and freshness, but

also

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local

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economy. usually, goods produced in regional sectors are supported by nearby production houses, in

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case, we're talking about foods. ingredients from local farm undeniably have

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processing steps and

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waste time

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delivering to another area,

therefore

people can have them more quickly as the veggies

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fresh. turning to other

section

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, local goods

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food

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section, but

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line. at the moment, there are a lot of local artists who

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their own brands.

for instance

, people currently use a shirt from small brands as they

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cheaper

price

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, but with the same quality from international

products

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this

action

also

helps

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gross domestic

products

and supports local artists.

to conclude

, getting

products

from local

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considered easier and

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more benefits either as a buyer or seller. people can create social connections through

this

activity.

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Topic Vocabulary:

advantage
local products
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Some people think it is always an advantage to buy local products. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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