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Some people think it is always an advantage to buy local products. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #advantage #products
nowadays, the trend of buying local
products
are
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 gradually increasing since many of them are well developed to
suits
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 the
citizens
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citizen's
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 activities. I strongly agree that getting goods from local brands will have more benefits, not only they can have better quality and freshness, but
also
supporting
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local
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the local
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 economy. usually, goods produced in regional sectors are supported by nearby production houses, in
this
 case, we're talking about foods. ingredients from local farm undeniably have
less
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 processing steps and
doesn't
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 waste time
for
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delivering to another area,
therefore
 people can have them more quickly as the veggies
still
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 fresh. turning to other
section
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sections
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, local goods
aren't only have
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don't only have
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food
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a food
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 section, but
also
clothing
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 line. at the moment, there are a lot of local artists who
had
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 their own brands.
for instance
, people currently use a shirt from small brands as they
got
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get
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 cheaper
price
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prices
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, but with the same quality from international
products
.
besides
 cheaper
price
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prices
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,
this
 action
also
 helps
increasing
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 gross domestic
products
 and supports local artists.
to conclude
, getting
products
 from local
are
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sources is
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 considered easier and
have
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 more benefits either as a buyer or seller. people can create social connections through
this
 activity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantage
  • local products
  • support
  • economy
  • carbon footprint
  • quality
  • freshness
  • cultural heritage
  • social connections
  • food safety
  • standards
  • sustainable
  • farming
  • production practices
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