Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter  suggest a suitable date and time for the party  recommend a venue  propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.

Dear Jean, I am writing
letter regarding Emily's retirement celebration in which I will explain a few arrangements for a celebration as you give me the responsibility.
, the gathering will be on the 23rd of December at 4 p.m.
due to
less busy hours. To explain
, the majority of people do not have time after office hours because of Christmas shopping,
, I tried to arrange in between the work period.
, Emily has a flight on the next day of party to the New York which means we have a limited period.
I was planning to organise a barbeque gathering, it has changed because of weather change.
, the party will be in the theatre of the building as it is spacious
as well as
, I am not only inviting the budget department but
the other departments as
could be a relaxing environment for all.
In addition
, I discussed all with her team and they suggested that organise some Indian
Correct your spelling
because she loves spicy curry.
, I
ordered a couple of pizzas for people who don't prefer spicy food.
but not least, a few secret games are
planned with prices to entertain the people. Please let me know if you want to make any changes. Hope to hear from you soon. Yours sincerely, Gurpinder
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task response
Ensure all the essential information requested in the task is included. Provide specific details for the venue, food, and entertainment options.
coherence and cohesion
Organize the content logically with clear paragraphs and connective devices to link ideas. Use appropriate greeting and closing phrases to convey the intended tone of the letter.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and clearly. Use formal and appropriate words and phrases for a business letter.
grammatical range
Work on sentence structure and grammar to convey ideas more accurately. Check for subject-verb agreement and punctuation errors.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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