The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in 1999.
The line chart illustrates the changes in the
number
of UK
residents
that visited other country
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another country
other countries
as well as
the number
of foreigner
that visited Change to a plural noun
foreigners
UK
from 1979 to 1999, Correct article usage
the UK
while
the bar chart presents some most visited countries
by UK
residents
in 1999, stated in millions
. Overall
, the number
of visit
to and from Fix the agreement mistake
visits
UK
increased and there are significant Correct article usage
the UK
differencies
in the Correct your spelling
differences
number
of UK
visitors to the five most popular countries
.
To begin
with, in 1979, the number
of worldwide residents
that went to UK
was 10 Correct article usage
the UK
millions
, Change to singular
million
while
the number
of UK
residents
that went abroad was just over 10 millions
. Up until sometime between 1984 and 1989, both Change to singular
million
number
increased steadily. Change to a plural noun
numbers
However
, in the following years, the number
of people living in UK
that went to Correct article usage
the UK
another
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another country
other countries
countries
went up dramatically to more than 50 millions
. Change to singular
million
On the other hand
, the number
of visitor
to Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
UK
Correct article usage
the UK
also
rose up
but less significantly to just under 30 million, resulting in a bigger gap between both data in 1999 compared to 1979.
Shifting the focus to the Change preposition
apply
countries
visited by UK
residents
, it is evident that France and Spain was two
most popular country Correct article usage
the two
by
pulling around 10 Change preposition
apply
millions
visitors in 1999. The other three, Turkey, Greece, and Change to singular
million
USA
, were less interesting and attracted Correct article usage
the USA
only
less than 5 Rephrase
apply
millions
Change to singular
million
UK
residents
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