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In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions?

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The right to
vote
 is being neglected by young
people
 in some nations.
This
 essay will first discuss that
this
 irresponsible behavior can hamper
country's
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a country's
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 development and they can lose their national identity card
and
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this
problem
 can be overcome by the enforcement of strict laws and by creating awareness among
general
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the general
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 public about the real impact of
this
. One
problem
 associated with neglecting the right to
vote
 is that
nation
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the nation
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 will suffer. It can make a win for the undeserving political party by making a difference in the number of votes, which can increase some other problems
such
 as inflation and unemployment.
Then
, they would have no one to blame, if
this
 happens.
An another
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problem
 is that their voting card or other national identity cards will be cancelled by
government
 authorities. In India,
for instance
, when the citizens of their state do not
vote
, the
government
 sends them an infringement letter
along with
 the cancellation notice of other important documents. An effective solution to mitigate
this
problem
 is that
government
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the government
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 should enforce strict laws for showing ignorance towards voting.
This
 would encourage
people
 to understand the importance of their responsibility towards
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the country
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country
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the country
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 and
also
 make them liable to face the consequences of not following the rules.
Apart from
this
,
government
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the government
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 should organize camps all around the year to aware or educate
public
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the public
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 about the significant impacts of not voting. When
people
 know the deeper effects of their irresponsible actions, they will probably stop doing
this
. Take
the
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Malaysia as an example, where political parties start doing rallies before
election
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the election
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, which is why, no Malaysian
miss
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misses
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 the opportunity to
vote
. In conclusion, the major problems that
occurs
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occur
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 are that it resists
country's
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the country's
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 development and loss of national identity document by
people
, and the solutions are enacting stringent laws and
create
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creating
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 awareness among
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratic process
  • political instability
  • skewed representation
  • governance
  • erosion
  • civic education
  • alienation
  • policy-making
  • accessible
  • incentives
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