Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health issues. Sugary products should b mad more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree.

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people
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are more inclined to suffer from
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disorders
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the consumption of
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and
drinks
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with
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more
sugar.
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, these
products
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should be sold
on
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at
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high
prices
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to steer
people
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for
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to
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healthy alternatives. I strongly agree
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this
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argument because not only
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reduced availability but
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being
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it is
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unaffordable for the public.
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.
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with,
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the cost of those
products
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might be seen rarely in the market which
discourage
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discourages
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consumers
to purchase
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from purchasing
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. To be exact, when
prices
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become more and more higher
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manufacturers
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manufactures
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manufacturers
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and retailers would not be able to supply persistently to the market
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that
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where
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that
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the public
unable
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is unable
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to reach
at
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apply
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apply
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the
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apply
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first glance.
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,
Sri
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the Sri
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Lankan government imposed
new
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a new
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tax
for
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on
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fast
food
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to enhance the cost of
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bakery
items to minimize
availability
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the availability
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of these
products
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and
this
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has been end up with lower consumption
of
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in
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the community and search for local
delicacy
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delicacies
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with higher nutritional
level
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levels
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. If not, being habitual to us for
long
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the long
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run would
lads
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lead
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to
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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society.
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,
expensiveness
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the expensiveness
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of the sugary item is beneficial to some extent to get rid of health issues.
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,
as a result
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of skyrocketing
prices
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, individuals
unable
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are unable
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afford
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as
thy liv
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they live
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in
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on
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tight
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a tight
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budget. To
b
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be
precise, customers would not be able to manage their daily expenses if they
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to spend more money on refreshments
on
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in
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daily
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their daily
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routine which may prone to find local healthy
low cost
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cost-effective
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alternatives
intead
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instead
.
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,
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the economic recession of
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apply
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Sri
Lanka
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Lanka,
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the public
tend
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tends
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to buy local
low sugar
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low-sugar
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healthy diets and
drinks
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as sugary
food
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and
drinks
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comparatively
on
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at
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higher
prices
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. It is not possible,
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people
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for people
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yet to be glued to
high calories
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high-calorie
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food
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and
drinks
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although
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thy
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they
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undergo enormous
non communicable
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non-communicable
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diseases
such
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as diabetes.
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becoming
mor
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more
expensive is
also
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impact
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an impact
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on positive way to community to stay away from disorders.
To conclude
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,
according to
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the above clarifications, if
people
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need to keep safe the government should
rise
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raise
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the
prices
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of
the
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apply
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sugary
products
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because it
reduce
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reduces
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feasibility
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the feasibility
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to buy
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of buying
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and
unable
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is unable
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to bear
to
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it to
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the public.
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