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Nowadays, many people prefer eating out rather than cooking at home. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #home #outweigh
In the contemporary era, most
people
 stopped cooking at home they got used to eating out.And
this
 kind of lifestyle has not only advantages but
also
 some disadvantages. On the one hand, eating out has several benefits.
Firstly
, when you go restaurant you will have many choices for meals.You can consume different dishes
such
 as foreign and international foods and junk
food
 is much tastier than home
food
.
Secondly
, no need to spend too much time is the main reason to digest processed meals.Another reason is most restaurants are located in beautiful places.
That is
 why many
people
 celebrate their parties in these areas.
On the other hand
,
this
 kind of
food
also
 provides disadvantages.One weakness is that prepared
food
 does not have information about the ingredients used in the meals. It means we definitely do not know how many calories are absorbed in our bodies. In the long run, we may face serious diseases
such
 as overweight, obesity, or diabetes.Another reason is the bad quality of prepared cooking.
In other words
, some restaurants may use poor-quality products or chemicals to boost taste and preservatives, which may have a negative effect on the customer's health in the long run. In conclusion,
although
 many
people
 think that buying ready foods is not useful for
people
,
however
, I believe that eating out can save time.
In addition
, consumers of these products can develop small businesses in local areas
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Task Achievement
The essay does not fully respond to the prompt. It lacks a clear position on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and the reasons provided are not well-developed or supported.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay lacks a clear overall structure. There is no clear introduction and the conclusion is weak. Additionally, the use of cohesive devices is limited, resulting in poor coherence and cohesion overall.
Lexical Resource
The essay demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary and uses informal language at times. It also shows inaccuracies in word choice and collocations, affecting the overall lexical resource.
Grammatical Range
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, including tense issues, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure problems. The use of complex structures is limited, impacting the grammatical range.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • social experience
  • cultural experience
  • variety
  • food choices
  • relief
  • cooking responsibilities
  • cost
  • health concerns
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