The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015

The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of international graduates in six
universities
in the UK in the years 2000 and 2015.
Overall
, the most international
alumni
came from
Oxford
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the Oxford
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campus, followed by Cambridge
university
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University
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,
while
the lowest international
alumni
Bristol and London education institutions.
To begin
with, in the year 2000 Cambridge and Oxford
universities
became the top international
alumni
with percentages of 15% and 14% respectively. There are no other
universities
that have more than ten per cent of their graduates namely Bath, Bristol and London campuses at 7%, 6% and 5% respectively,
while
in the middle is Cardiff at 10%. Meanwhile, in 2015 Oxford University had the highest campus with a total of
alumni
at 25%, followed by Cambridge at 24%. There were three campuses that had more than 10%, namely London at 20%, Cardiff at 14% and Bath
universities
at 12%,
whereas
the lowest of international
alumni
this
year was Bristol at 9%.
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