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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The figure of households in
the
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America by their yearly in 2007, 2011 and 2015 is illustrated by
this
 bar chart,
devide
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divide
divided
 by five different degrees: below
than
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$25,000, $50,000, $75,000, 100,000 and more than those. In general, quite not
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noticeable
noticeably
changed
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 between those three years, the
groups
 in less than 0.5
bilions
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billion
 and more than 1
bilions
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billion
 are
significant
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 bigger than
groups
 in 25
milion
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million
 s to $74,999
milions
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million
millions
. Looking more closely at the chart, the household number of
people
 in $75,000- $99,999 is the lowest than other
groups
,
apporexaly
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apparently
 only 15,000
people
 from 2007 to 2015. The group in number of 50
millons
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million
 to 74,999
millions
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million
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 is second lowest follow them, almost 20,000
people
. In
term
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to
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 those two
groups
 under $50,000, they are in the same situation
that
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not
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no
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 big
changed
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 in those
peroids
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periods
, not
leave
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 the number between 25 to 30
millions
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million
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.
Finaly
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Finally
, the
numbers
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 of
people
 who
given
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 100
millions
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million
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 in annual was from almost 30,000 in 2007, had the biggest
changed
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 to 35,000 in 2015.
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