Many people today are choosing to live and work in another country after graduating from univei rsity in their home country. Why is this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
nowadays, most
of
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the
communities have been selecting to reside Correct article usage
apply
down
abroad after their higher degree. Change preposition
apply
As because
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Because
of
, in their home Correct pronoun usage
of this
country
they donnot
have enough Correct your spelling
do not
don't
oppertunites
what they are expectingCorrect your spelling
opportunities
for
. In my opinion, Change preposition
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dwell
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dwelling in
at
foreign Correct your spelling
a
country
is a good option to choose. in the following Correct your spelling
essay
easy
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i
discuss Change the capitalization
I
about
my point of view.
first of all, Remove the preposition
apply
in
overseas there are lots of Change preposition
apply
oppurtunities
, Correct your spelling
opportunities
good
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a good
life style
, and a secure Correct your spelling
lifestyle
job
are
available. Unnecessary verb
apply
Further more
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Furthermore
a fresh graduates
can do Correct the article-noun agreement
fresh graduates
a fresh graduate
what ever
he/she wants, Correct your spelling
whatever
moreover
, they dont
need any kind of experience to find a Correct your spelling
don't
job
. not only job
but Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
also
they can open a new business their
right away. Correct your spelling
there
For example
, In Italy
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Italy,
a
fresh Correct article usage
apply
under
graduates can Change preposition
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many
options for Add a missing verb
have many
job
in many fields Add an article
a job
the job
whereas
, in Bangladesh a post graduate
hardly find a Correct your spelling
postgraduate
job
either, he/she manage
a Change the verb form
manages
job
there
minimum wage a ten times less Replace the word
their
then
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than
a developed countries
.
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developed countries
a developed country
On the other hand
, after completing a degree if most of the rabble goes to
abroad it is a great loss for a home Remove the preposition
apply
country
. In future, young
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the young
genaration
have to lead the Correct your spelling
generation
nation
but if the fresh graduate goes to different
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a different
nation
their
might be a lack of development in various department Replace the word
there
likeas
, Correct your spelling
like
infustructure
, engineering and many other. Correct your spelling
infrastructure
For instance
, In
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apply
a
statistics shows that 65% Correct article usage
apply
fresh
graduate from reputed universities Change preposition
of fresh
from
Bangladesh Change preposition
in
are going
to different countries after Wrong verb form
go
there
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their
gratuation
. for that Correct your spelling
graduation
reason
the Add a comma
reason,
country
remain
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remains
under developed
.
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underdeveloped
overall
, everyone wants a good life for that they need a good environment and many other thinks
like Correct your spelling
things
as
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apply
oppurtunites
, Correct your spelling
opportunities
education
system and so on. In a developed Correct article usage
an education
country
the education system and job
facilities is
five times Change the verb form
are
batter
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better than
then
a
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in a
under developed
county usually people are willing to move Correct your spelling
underdeveloped
another
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to another
nation
f or their future home.
to sum up
, Become
a part of a Wrong verb form
Becoming
nation
development is a pride but in Change noun form
nation's
foreign
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a foreign
country
there is
are lots of Unnecessary verb
apply
opputunities
to become succeed so, Correct your spelling
opportunities
young
generation Correct article usage
the young
choose
to go abroad to lead a good Correct subject-verb agreement
chooses
life style
.Correct your spelling
lifestyle
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