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One of the most important issues facing the world today is a shortage of food and some think genetically modified food is a possible solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?.

#world #shortage #food #think
There is no denying the fact that
shortage
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 of
food
 can be a debatable subject.
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It is a commonly held belief that some individuals believe that one of
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it
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is genetically
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. there is
also
 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that being rich does genetically modified
food
 will dominate the
food
 sector.
To begin
 with, Genetically modified
food
 can help address the issue of
food
 shortage.
In other words
, it can help
in
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increase
food
 stock around the world.
In addition
, Genetically modified
food
 can increase crop yields and reduce wastage.
For example
, there was a study done in 2015 which supported the idea and it said that 80%
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help
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 in
faceing
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facing
 the shortage of
food
. Another point to consider is that Genetically modified
food
 can be resistant to pests and diseases. It is
also
 possible to say that,
becuase
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because
 we use
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chemical
 stuff it
help
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in
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protect
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 it from pests.
Moreover
, it will help in providing stable resources that can help individuals in need.
For instance
, it can be resources can be used to support poor
counteries
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countries
. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that the future of
food
it
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is genetically modified
food
, and it will become bigger than ever because it provides individuals and
counteries
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countries
with stable resources of
foos
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food
, I suggest that the governments make programs that help to improve it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shortage
  • genetically modified
  • crop yields
  • wastage
  • resistant
  • pests
  • diseases
  • potential health risks
  • biodiversity
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