The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below illustrates the distribution of private insurance policies in the world,
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the table illustrates the distribution of areas in which
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used in India, England and Australia.
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,
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and
health
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have the largest proportion of the
overall
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share. The other significant feature is that
Englands'
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population have the largest number of people with
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among the other nations.
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occupy
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35% of the
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share, which is the biggest proportion compared with the others.
Life
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has 28% of the total share, which is 3% less than
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. The
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6% are
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of other types. 25% of
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population have
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insurance, which is mainly distributed in
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, with 10%,
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and
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have 7.9% and 5.7% respectively.
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,
Africas'
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are mainly used in
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, with 3.5%, which
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the number of
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,
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only 0.4%
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auto
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.
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, 15% of the total population in Australia have
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insurance,
which
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1.9% belongs to
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, 1.3% to
health
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and only 0.5% to
life
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words insurances, auto, health, life with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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