The charts below show the propotions of british, students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the propotions of british, students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts provide information about British students who
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able to speak
another languages
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another language
other languages
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besides
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their mother tongue in England in 2000 and 2010.The presented charts are
also
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being compared to each other in the same years in percentage. At
the
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first glance, it is obvious that not only
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the number of British students who cannot speak any other languages decrease
,
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but
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the amount of Spanish being spoken
increase
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in 2010 compared to 2000. The first pie chart illustrates that the
most
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language which had been spoken after English was Spanish. The rate of
another languages
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another language
other languages
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being spoken
were as
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equal
as
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French.
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, based on
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the presented
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chart, the number of people who could not speak a second language was so high in 2000. The interesting point is that the
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of
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Spanish being spoken
just
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is just
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the same as another language percentage in
second
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a second
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pie chart.
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