Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some say that
people
should
work
in the
country
where they studied and trained,
while
others believe that individuals are free to choose where they want to go.
This
essay will argue that
although
countries
do
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make
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a
lot
of effort to train these
people
, they have the right to choose where they want to
work
because they have their own dreams. On the one hand, some professions
such
as doctors, scientists and engineers need many years to finish
the
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their
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career
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careers
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.
Then
, governments spend a
lot
of money and time to train and prepare them, so
in
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that in
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the
future
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future,
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they can succeed and help to improve the
country
. If they decide to
work
in other
countries
,
then
the nation where they have
take
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taken
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classes will not gain anything.
For example
, many Chinese scientists went to the United States to
study
their
career
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careers
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, but after graduating they went back to China, and almost no one knows where they have studied.
However
, in my opinion,
people
pay for university, so
countries
have
gain
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enough funds from the students.
On the other hand
, some
people
have wasted a
lot
of money to travel to other
countries
to
study
.
This
is because
of
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the reputation of the place or the
country
from where they come from,
do
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does
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not offer classes related to the
career
. So the only option they have
,
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is to
study
in other nations and
then
go back to their
country
, in
this
way, education in their
country
can improve.
For instance
, some developing and
no developed
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underdeveloped
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countries
do not have engineering careers because are very difficult areas that they have not learnt yet, so
people
only can travel to other nations to
study
the
career
. I believe that allowing
people
to
work
where they want will improve education
of
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in
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all
countries
. In conclusion,
although
countries
spend a
lot
of time teaching and training
people
, they have the right to follow their dreams or get back to their
countries
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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