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Some people say that watching TV programmes and movies related to crime are popular. Why do you think it’s popular and how does it affect society?

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 letter to suggest a name ,
Mr.
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 Rakesh Prasad, for the recognition and award he deserves for his contribution to helping a rural village in India. Mr. Rakesh Prasad is a reputed and well-known doctor specialising in treating patients with cardiovascular diseases. Through national media, he came to find out that in a rural village
of
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 India people are dying of heart
attack
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attacks
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 and other related cardiovascular diseases
due to
 a cloth merchandising factory disposing of its by-products mixed with harmful chemicals in a local river which was causing a blockage in the arteries of locals when they were using
this
water
 for domestic use
such
 as drinking. Locals were using a generic
water
 purifier which was not enough to remove all the toxic chemicals,
therefore
 he decided to take matters into his own hands and using his personal finances came up with a powerful
water
 purifier which used
cholrinification
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cornification
 and ultra-violet
filteration
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filtration
 to make the
water
 drinkable again and
also
 supported local villagers to file a
law-suit
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 against the factory's malpractice. I suggest that the local government should nominate his name for
Mother
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 Teresa Award and the newspaper should print an article on
this
 person's contribution towards society.
Thankyou
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, Ishpreet Soni
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vocabulary
Use a wider range of vocabulary and avoid repetition for better lexical resource.
grammar
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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