Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

While
it is sometimes thought that
students
in single-sex
schools
perform better academically.
However
,other people believe that mixed
schools
provide
children
with better social skills for
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life. In my opinion, I consider that
study
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in single-sex
school
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is better for the
students
to give their best without any distractions.
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the one hand, some people think that
children
are better able to relax around other
children
of the same sex.
In other words
,
children
feel comfortable with their
same sex
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And
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in
himself
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without any feeling
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.
For example
, in
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most
of
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the
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school
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make
separation
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a separation
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between the sexes to let them give their best.
As a result
, every
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will focus on his own studying without forcing on
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gender
.
Furthermore
, when the two
gender
studies together have many
of
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problems
such
as fighting and rape. Agree with
this
statement.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that
children
need
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of
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interacting with the opposite sex, when the two sexual studies study together they will learn from each other.
For instance
, in UK
schools
they make
students
both
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gender
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to
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study together to create
better
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environment.
Hence
, learning in a coed environment can help foster respect, understanding, and empathy between genders.Another reason is that
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It can help to reduce
gender
stereotypes and create an atmosphere of equality. In conclusion,
while
may vary in
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opinion, I think that
students
should be separated. If they make
schools
one single-sex
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all
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world, they would create a great environment with
best
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education system.
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  • minimize distractions
  • gender-related learning styles
  • tailored learning environment
  • sense of empowerment
  • underrepresented
  • bridge the gender gap
  • emulate real-world environments
  • promoting interactions
  • communicate and collaborate
  • break down gender stereotypes
  • mutual respect
  • inclusivity
  • well-rounded individuals
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