A friend of yours is thinking of going on a campus holiday for the first time this summer. He / She has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday - describe some possible disadvantages - say whether you would like to camping with your friend this summer Write at least 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follow: Dear….,

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summer

Use synonyms

vacations

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vacation

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trip

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Despite

Correct pronoun usage

Despite this

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, some drawbacks were there during camping on the beach like limited accommodation and it was expensive living in camps.

Furthermore

Linking Words

, limited food facility was

also

Linking Words

problem

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the problem

a problem

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that you cannot eat different cuisine. When I received your email I was happy to see that you are going on the

summer

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holidays.

Besides

Linking Words

this

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, I felt great that you would camping with your family. I have been to Dubai two times with my family and I feel nostalgic whenever I remember those days. It was

fantastic

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a fantastic

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trip

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and we had planned for five days and we

spent

Verb problem

had

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relaxing

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a relaxing

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time.

Although

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, We had many things to do we played volleyball, badminton and thug games.

Dubai

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Dubai's

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ambiance

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ambience

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is perfect for

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summer

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a summer

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trip

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trips

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and many people come from abroad to enjoy

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apply

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summer

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days. You could enjoy

with

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apply

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these activities and make your time memorable. Would it be OK

that

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had gone

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went

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with you on

this

Linking Words

trip

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? If it

fine

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is fine

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then

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I'll make arrangements

of booking

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to book

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ticket

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a ticket

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and accommodation for

this

Linking Words

trip

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. If you allow

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apply

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apply

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I can reserve

hotel

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a hotel

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near

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apply

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the beach so we

could

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can

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live together. I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Warm Wishes,

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task response

Provide a clear response to the task prompt and address all of the required bullet points in the prompt. Also, avoid mixing up personal experiences with the task scenario.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure a proper greeting and closing for the letter. Use appropriate linking words and phrases to help the letter flow more smoothly and cohesively.

lexical resource

Expand your vocabulary and use a wider range of lexical resources to express ideas more clearly and precisely.

grammatical range

Improve the accuracy and range of your grammar, including appropriate use of verb tenses, sentence structures, and punctuation.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

216 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

tent
campfire
hiking
backpacking
campsite
wilderness
reconnect
tranquility
camping gear
outdoor activities
adventurous
survival skills
weather conditions
ecotourism
teamwork
star-gazing
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The Greeting

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