The graph below give information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below give information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The graph illustrates data regarding the proportion of the total
number
of people in
Indonesia
, Malaysia,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and Thailand living in urban areas from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 to 2040
Overall
, it is clearly apparent that
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the percentage of
population
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the population
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of people living in cities in
Indonesia
, Malaysia,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and Thailand will experience an upward trend over the
period
. At the beginning of the
period
, the total
number
of inhabitants in urban areas in Malaysia was 30% and increased
further
to about 47% in 1990, from which it experienced a steady rise and it is expected to have a
population
of almost 90% in 2040.
However
,
Indonesia
recorded the lowest
number
of inhabitants
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the
city
in 1970, it started off with a little above 10% at the beginning of the
period
, which was the lowest percentage and
predicted
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to experience an upward trend
at the end
of the
period
with about 62%. In 1970,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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had a little about 30%
people
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of people
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living in the
city
, which was the highest in that year as compared to the other countries within that same time
period
 . It experienced
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fluctuation
fluctuations
through out
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throughout
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the
period
where it crossed
path
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with
Indonesia
in 2010 and is
predicated
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predicted
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to have a
population
of about 55% in 2040. Whiles Thailand in 1970 had about 20% of its
population
living in the
city
,
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and experienced a steady increase
there of
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to
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30% in 1990, the
number
of
city
inhabitants
then
experienced
a
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relative stability from that
period
to 2020 after which it is
extimated
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estimated
to rise to about 44% in 2040 which is the country with the least predicted
city
population
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, indonesia, population, period, city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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