The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in

England between 1985 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Average distance in miles travelled per person per year, by mode of travel
The table figure below illustrates data
of
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the usage rate of different
travel
modes in England which have shown some change based on the travelled
distance
on
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the span of 1985 to 2000.
Overall
, the sum of the travelled
distance
in
miles
is showing
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an upward trend, going from around 4700
miles
in
year
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1985 to just under 6475
miles
in
year
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2000.
Although
the
overall
total result is going in a positive trend, not all of the
travel
modes are growing equally.
Firstly
, it is apparent that some
travel
methods
shown
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an increase in the total
distance
traveled, with
Car
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the Car
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as the
travel
method which
have
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the largest surge of a whopping 1600
miles
resulting in a total of 4806
miles
which
constitute
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more than
a
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half of the total travelled
distance
.
Similarly
, several other
travel
methods are
also
showing quite promising growth with
Train
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Trains
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, Long
distance
bus
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buses
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, and other
travel
methods showing positive
trend
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trends
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in the smaller scale with the sum of
distance
growth under the 100s with 366
miles
, 124
miles
, and 585
miles
.
On the other hand
, several transportation modes are being used less
frequent
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in
year
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2000 compared to
the
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1985. The most diminished transportation mode is the Local bus which almost lost half of the total mileage travelled, going from 429
miles
to under the three
hundreds
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. Showing a similar result
although
less drastic is the Bicycle which
shown
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showed
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a slight decrease of 10
miles
, resulting in a mere 41
miles
in
year
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2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, distance, miles, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.

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