The chart below shows the oercentage of household in owned and rented in accommodation in Englan and Wales between 1918 and 2011N

The chart below shows the oercentage of household in owned and rented in accommodation in Englan and Wales between 1918 and 2011N
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bar chart portrays the
proportion
of families who have their own house and choose to rent accommodation in two countries (England and Wales) from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
,
it is clear that
renting a property had steadily
rose
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in both countries in the first period, but the trend continued to decrease until 2011. Meanwhile, having a house as an owner was in reverse, from the beginning until the end. Looking into details, the graph shows the figure of families who had leased accommodation in two cities had
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proportion
(almost 80%) in 1918. The rate witnessed
decrease
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, dropping to under 70% in 1939 and 1953.
Moreover
, the percentage experienced a fall until 2001 at around 30% and the rate rose again in a small
proportion
but had not yet reached 40%.
On the other hand
, there were just over 20% accounted for families deciding to buy property in the first period. In the following years, the percentage gradually increased from 1939 and peaked in 2001 at nearly 70%.
However
, ten years later, the
proportion
in
this
type had reduced at a minute rate yet the percentage was still higher than other groups.
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