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The graph below give information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below give information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The
termin
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term
 that describes
process
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the process
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 of civilian removal from local towns to big cities
called
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 urbanisation. The graph below shows
percentage
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the percentage
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 of the folk in 4 Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 and with prognosis for 2030 and 2040.
Firstly
, seems that the biggest growth
of
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in
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city
population
 happened in Malaysia. Only 30% of all citizens
were
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lived in big cities in 1970 and
then
, in
twenty
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first
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twenty-first
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century
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century,
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this
 index rocketed more than 2 times. From
beginning
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the beginning
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 of the
millenium
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millennium
 and to 2020
city
population
use to stabilly
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has been steadily
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 increasing. Predictions for 2030 and 2040
is
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are
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 similar to each other
,
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 but higher than real
city
 folk in 2020.
Second
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 country in
graph
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the graph
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 is Indonesia.
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A land
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 country with less than
quarter
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a quarter
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percents
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percent
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 of
crowd
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the crowd
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 living in big towns in 1970, has
growed
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grown
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 up megapolis
population
 to more than
a
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half of the total people. And their forecast
to
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for
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 2030 and 2040 is really positive.
Philippines
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The Philippines
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 is the third country in
table
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the table
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. Their town citizen value moved up from 30% in 1970 to less than
a
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half of the total crowd in 2020. They guess that their megapolis
population
 will keep
stabilly
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stability
 growing up in 2030 and 2040. In conclusion,
urbanisation
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the urbanisation
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 process in all countries is a main option that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
governments
need
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needs
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 to work
about
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on
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. Every civilian should have a right and opportunity to live in
city
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the city
a city
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.
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