The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000.

The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000.
The line charts give statistical
data
from 1920 until 2000 about the achievement packages delivered using
FedEx
and
TNT
post services.
In addition
, the
data
shows information based on the numbers of
mail
two biggest companies. In general, the line chart had fluctuating
data
.
In contrast
, the majority value of
TNT
company
had increased.
Besides
that,
FedEx
had the highest decreasing
number
of delivered
mail
. Regarding increased
data
, we can see the highest increased gradient of package
mail
delivery of
TNT
from 1980 until 1990, where the
number
delivered in 1980 the approximately 11000
mail
delivered. Meanwhile, in 1990, The
TNT
company
had reach sent
mail
to 22000
parcels
.
On the other hand
, we can get information
TNT
company
had growing services. In terms of the decreased value of
FedEx
, the highest decreased
number
of delivered
parcels
from 1940 until 1950, where the
number
of sent
parcels
used
FedEx
in 1940 got sent
mail
the approximately 24000 package
parcels
.
Moreover
, in 1950,
FedEx
company
failed to protect the consumer. The effect is the rate of delivered
parcels
by
FedEx
decreases until approximately 14000
mail
sent
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