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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The charts show the qualities employers and employees think are important in job seekers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The charts show the qualities employers and employees think are important in job seekers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The pie graph displays the most important skills of applicants that will be able to
getting
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 a job and the bar chart illustrates what qualities are mentioned in job
adverts
 that employers want from candidates.
Overall
, the education of the candidate is the most crucial
features
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 compared to other requirements, and references are only insignificantly important.
According to
adverts
, most employers seek
for
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an organised team members
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organised team members
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rather than innovative individuals. The proportion of education
of
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applicants
are
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 almost 40%,
being
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 the most important
features
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 by far.
While
 work experience is just above a quarter, technical skills are nearly a quarter. The enthusiasm and passion is 7% which is slightly higher than the proportion of references by 3%. In
adverts
,
on the other hand
, it is promoted that employers looking for different qualities
such
 as organised and motivated employees over innovative and passionate individuals. "Organised"
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around
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 100
thousand
adverts
, being the most advertised words,
and
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its
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followed by "communication skills" and "motivation"
by
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 above
60
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than 60
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thousand
 advertisements. "Qualification", "flexibility", "degree", "commitment", and "
passionate
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" are mentioned
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between
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 60 and 40
thousand
adverts
. "Track record" and "innovative" are only involved in approximately 40
thousand
adverts
.
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