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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report fo a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report fo a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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The map illustrates the change
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Chorleywood
, a
village
 near London from1868 to 1994.
Overall
, the first recorded location of
Chorleywood
 is just beside
to
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the middle of
main
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the main
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 road in
Chorleywood
park
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Park
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 and
golf course
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Golf Course
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 and
then
 the
village
 expanded
different
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 locations;
therefore
, new roads
constructed
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 for transportation. Between 1868 and 1883,
Chorleywood
first
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 located in the area of
Chorleywood
park
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Park
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 and
golf course
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Golf Course
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 beside the middle part of the main road which lies from the to the south-west. It
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 to the south-west, following the main road over
the
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almost 40 years. In 1909,
railway
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is
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 built along the west to the
south-east
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southeast
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, crossing the new
expantion
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expansion
 area. From 1922 to 1970, the
village
 developed through the area of the west to the railway. In 1970, the motorway
built
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 to improve transportation, aligning the north to the west. After 1970, the
village
 grew
through
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mostly beside the motorway until 1994.
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