The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These charts together
illustrated
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the average
consumimg
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consumption
percentage of three types
nutrients
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of nutrients
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in typical meals in
USA
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the USA
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.
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,
it is clear that
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in
case
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the case
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of sodium, at
dinner
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people took the most of it.
On the other hand
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in
breakfast
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and
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snacks
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snacks,
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they adopted the minimum amount. As for
staurated
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saturated
fat in
dinner
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and for added sugar in
snacks
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people ate the most. On opposite in
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breakfast
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breakfast,
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both of these
nutrients comsuming
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nutrient-consuming
rate
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was
in
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at
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the lowest.
In the
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The
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first chart,
it showed
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shows
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about eating
rate
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of sodium. The highest
rate
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of taking it was in
dinner
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which is 45% and the lowest
rate
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was in
snacks
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and
breakfast
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,the
rate
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is 14% for both
meal
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meals
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.
In the
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The
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second chart
gave
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gives
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the percentages
about
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for
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saturated fat. People devoured 37% of it
in
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at
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dinner
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which is the apex
rate
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. On the
contra
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contrary
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in
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breakfast
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breakfast,
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they swallowed
this
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nutrient at
minimum
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a minimum
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rate
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and the
rate
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is 16%.
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Finally
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Finally,
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the
last
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chart is for added sugar. In
the
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apply
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term
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terms
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of added
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sugar
suger
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suger,
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they took 45%
in
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of
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snacks
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which was the highest
rate
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. On reverse , only 16% of added sugar was taken in
breakfast
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and
this
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is the
least
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lowest
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rate
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of taking
this
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nutrient.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, breakfast, snacks, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentages
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • meal
  • typical meals
  • categories
  • high percentage
  • distribution
  • patterns
  • trends
  • nutrient-dense
  • data
  • comparison
  • summarize
  • reporting main features
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