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In recent years, online education is becoming more and more popular. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon? Use specific details and examples to explain your opinion.

#years #education #phenomenon
Having online classes is widespread and famous in the past several years which became more noticeable during the pandemic of Covid-19. Granted that having classes is becoming more convenient or less complex
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online, it still has
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 impact on people in many ways as well. There are reasons to support the claim. In my perspective, adapting the
uses
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 of mobile phone in education would benefit the teenagers who are still in school;
however
,
this
 should be limited as it
also
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 disadvantages which
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 harmful to the susceptible young people. For
the
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youngsters, it is beneficial for them
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 through the online platform as it saves them a lot of
time
 to prepare. Young individuals will not be wasting their
time
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traveling
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 to school as they are capable of studying at home.
In addition
,
due to
 less
time
 being
comsumed
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consumed
, they would have their own extra
time
 for either relaxing or studying which will increase the potential of studying of
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adolescents.
Nonetheless
, there are
also
 cons
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 having
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 electronically. As they are not going to school, it is like they are being isolated meaning young individuals are not socializing as much as they are supposed.
Furthermore
, using mobile phones all the
time
 can pose
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vast
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 problems leading to many problems in their future lives and careers.
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, they tend to be addicted to
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social media more as they always
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the
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phone
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 with them which is a serious issue nowadays. In summary, the advantages of the mobile phone
is
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 obviously
assiting
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assisting
 students in learning;
nonetheless
, it
also
 has cons which might cause many problems in the future.
Thus
, it poses the guardians to be in charge of limiting
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 of the
time
in
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 using phones of
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adolescents.
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