The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  Write at least 150 words.   (20 mins.)
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of 4 different groups product of retail in Canada that have been
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through the internet website, comparing
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2005 and 2010.
Overall
, electronics and home furnishings decreased
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5 years later, whilst food and games increased. In terms of electronics and appliances reached the apex in the first year,
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in 2010, they dropped around 5
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, remaining approximately 30
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.
However
, they still played
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role
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the online market.
In addition
, home furnishings declined 10
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over 5 years period, from a quarter to 15
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respectively.
In contrast
, food and beverage and video games had an upward trend. Food sored from
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third place, 22
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in 2005 and jumped to the best seller in 2010.
Furthermore
, video games climbed gradually. Starting with the least kinds of selling product and rose to 23
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at the end
of the time.
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