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Band 4

Today, many peolpe do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

#peolpe #neighbours #cities
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There can be little doubt that
kots
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lots
 of
people
 do not know their
neighbours
 in many large cities. The problem is many
peolpe
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people
 are very busy and they less talk with each other near their house. That
make
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makes
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 them don't know who
live
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lives
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 near them and their community
more lessly
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. The
under lying
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underlying
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 root of the problem is
lack
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the lack
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 of
aware
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 so bad. Because in the large cities ,
people
 in here working hard and
busy
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 all
the
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apply
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day
of
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the
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apply
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week . They work early in the morning and lately at night. So they
not
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do not
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 have time to
chatting
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,
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or talking
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talking
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talk
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 with their
neighbours
.
This
 is true,
Ho
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in Ho
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 Chi Minh
city
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City
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,
where
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one of the most popular cities in Viet Nam, a lot of
people
 in there work full day
of
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the week and when they go home, they just stay at home and lazy to go outside. Perhaps a solution to the problem of
neighbours
 is
go
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to go
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 to meet some new
neighbours
 or be friendly
give
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and give
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 a gift for them to easy talking. If you have some special thing
such
 as
sovernerswhen
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governer when
 you have gone holiday, you can share or give them.
In many
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apartment
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apartments
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 have a park on the ground, so many
people
 can
chatting
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 together and have fun.
Thus
 it can be seen that
neighbours
 are one of
people
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the people
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can
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who can
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 help you when you have problems or
accident
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accidents
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 at home.
Therfore
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Therefore
, we should be friendly and kind to meet our
neighbours
 ,
make
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and make
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a
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apply
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good relationships
between
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with
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people
live
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who live
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 near
house
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the house
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.
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