The line chart below shows the effect of vaccination on the number of reported cases of whooping cough, a childhood disease, in Britain.

The line chart below shows the effect of vaccination on the number of reported cases of whooping cough, a childhood disease, in Britain.
The line chart below shows the effect of vaccination on the number of reported
cases
of whooping cough, a childhood disease, in Britain. The data was collected between the years 1940 and 1990.
Overall
, vaccination resulted in a great reduction in the spread of
this
illness. In 1940, there were already over 40 thousand
cases
reported.
This
number quickly tripled to just under 180,000 infected followed by the drop to its previous level. After that,
this
quantity fluctuated between 60,000 and 100,000 for the next 48 months. The second highest peak (above 160,000 affected) occurred in the early 1950s. In 1957, the vaccination began.
This
had resulted in a massive decrease in
cases
of cough by 1963, reaching
the
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minimum of under 20 thousand.
This
figure had fluctuated from about 0
cases
to 40,000 until 1978, which is when the vaccine uptake plummeted from 81 per cent down to 30. The result of that was the new peak achieved by the illness in just 24 months. Fortunately, people began to uptake the vaccine again at even higher rates, than before, which caused the cough to gradually become less spread until it was almost eliminated in the 1990's by keeping the number of affected slightly above 0.
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